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    dots Submission Name: look into my eyesdots
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    Author: sunset
    ASL Info:    21/F/Melb, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 76/46/32
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
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    dotslook into my eyesdots
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    Look into my eyes, he said
    While he discovered me
    Holding onto everything
    As he stares into my soul
    What is he searching for
    All that is under my skin
    Is melting into him
    I know he sees my hurt
    Doesn’t find the love
    Keep trying to fight it
    But when he sees me
    How else can I explain
    The knowledge of him
    Killing me softly with her
    Yet through my anger
    I choose to stay
    Locked inside his arms
    Ever playing the fool
    Because he says to me
    Over and over again
    Look into my eyes…




    Submitted on 2006-06-27 22:04:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is good
    I cant help but think though that this could really become much better
    If you want to and I stress this is totally up to you maybe include some more of the reasons why you feel this way like what has he done to you to hurt you so much
    When you put these emotions into words it is a way of healing the heart so that negativity no longer can bother you
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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