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    Author: Orin
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 93/97/43
    Words: 259
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
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       Don't even worry about what this is. It makes sense to me. Just a rant.


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    I broke something pretty. I played with it and it broke. It was somebody else's toy. But I had to have it. Funny...we are never content with anything. No matter how much shit we have, we always want more. We want something else. Something trivial. Something that someone else has. Something we can go out and get for ourselves. But no. We have to take theirs. We are jealous. We are envious. We are angry. We are lustful and we are gluttonous. We are sinners and according to The Bible, we are all going to fucking Hell. Accepting Jesus into our hearts and minds will not help. We will not be sung to by angels with harps, we will be poked by demons as we burn for eternity to repent for our sins. There is no salvation. Why bother? Why pray? Why go to church?

    We go to church because we are selfish. We want salvation all for ourselves. You don't need to go to church to have God in your life. You don't need to buy a cross and dangle it around your neck to show that you have accepted Jesus. You just need to not be a shitbag. Forget trying to get saved every Sunday. You're just doing something for yourself. Don't.

    Read the bible. Preach it to others. Give to a charity. Sacrifice a lamb on an altar with the dagger of the holy pwnage. Become the person others will read about in the newspaper. Be a productive member of society.




    Submitted on 2006-06-27 22:09:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      THere is a lot of truth in this....but then again there are some things that mada me kind of....eh....

    True that we do not need to be in church every Sunday to show that we accept God in our lives. True that we don't need to wear the cross around our neck....

    But when it comes to God and salvation.....we can never be selfish....we must all keep our faith...and we are in fact in control of our own faith.

    You boldly went out on this one...and I commend you for that. Not too often that somebody can ramble and it be worth listening to.

    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I don't know if I've ever read anything that held as much truth as this does.

    The first line in the beginning reminds me of the guy in Fight Club who wanted to "destroy something pretty." Dont know why. I think it was just the way you worded it.

    And the end is something I've been trying to explain to someone for a very long time. But he'll never get it, so I stopped trying.

    Anyways, I like the way you said it. All of it.

    Wonderfully done
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]


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