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    dots Submission Name: The life of a convictdots

    Author: heavy knowledge
    ASL Info:    15/m/slidell, L.a.(N.O.)
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 106/156/34
    Words: 289
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe life of a convictdots

    Niggas locked up in solitary playin solitare
    All because gun smoke was dispersed amongst the air
    You say you dont own a gun and you whern't there
    But a glance at a tattoed tear under ur eye makes a cop stare
    And becomes his ether to his flame of prejudgement
    And now u have reached a point of resentment
    Lips are pink, skin is a tinted shade, and ur nose is over grown
    Now u thinks its sill that your proud to call the ghetto your home
    Now your in a cell that u can't call ur own and neither can u say the same about ur azz
    Just because Big Red took your man hood a ran through it like a lawnmore does grass
    You become a jailbird who's song goes unsung
    Bumb Big Red in the hall and u find a fork in ur lung
    Wakin up with a lite in ur face tryin to predtermine wether your in heaven or back in hell
    But still u wake up in jail just moved to a differnt cell
    This time ur locked up with a man from a past life whom your soul seems to know
    And all u talk about is the outside and how u cant wait till u see your hoes
    But even more
    You miss doin a Banner and get down on the floor
    But anyways
    This happens to be a differnt day
    Your cell mat hung out with the wrong croud for confused reasons
    So now he wont be able to see the next season
    Pass and change
    Like a puzzle that seems to rearange
    See you when you get out
    So the dawn of your new life can start to sprout

    Submitted on 2006-06-28 00:13:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I've been there several times and this depressed me. It is a little different in CA. Nobody is in chains all of the time. Also nobody has to lie on the floor. I'm glad that you wrote this. Keep up this type of poetry. Good luck to you.
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by usglen | [ Reply to This ]
      I have never been there. But this seems like a very mature subject for somebody as young you are. Very depressing material and I am assuming that is the point of it.
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by St. Agatha | [ Reply to This ]
      this one isn't as good as the stuff that u had been writing right before the storm. i guess u lost the lyrical flare kid. u better get back on the grind. oh by the way...try leaving real comments next time. now i gotta catch up with all those comments cuz of u, u skank!
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Quite potent in information on this type of lifestyle Chaz. Vivid, but not overly graphic. I do feel that this was not as ground breaking as your previous works. Although it was good, it seem like something changed with your style. I would only suggest that you may want to give a even more more grim account of this lifestyle and even out the flow. Make it more in your face. Other then that, you did a good job.

    | Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]

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