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    dots Submission Name: Only Humandots

    Author: Freespyryt554
    ASL Info:    18/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    1.85 - 46/41/30
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsOnly Humandots

    Don’t get me wrong, love
    I don’t mean to say those things
    Sometimes things come out wrong
    We’re all human…right?
    Can’t you see what I mean?
    In my eyes the truth is burning…can’t you understand?

    I want to do you good, love
    I don’t want to mess things up
    I don’t want to say the wrong things…
    But I’m only human
    Isn’t that part of life?
    Please don’t hold that against me…I never hold it against you

    Listen carefully, love
    Can’t you hear my heart?
    Can’t you hear it calling what I want to tell you?
    Its words are pure
    Made of gold….pure gold
    They flow like milk and honey…listen to them love…listen
    © Ashley Tetz 06/27/06

    Submitted on 2006-06-28 00:52:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Again, I like this one a lot Ashley. I can tell that these poems were written more recently than your past writings, even without the dates at the bottom. I can see a maturity in these that the others seemed to be lacking. This is such a great piece, I loved every bit of it, except one thing.

    They flow like milk and honey

    I just, I just don't like that part. I'm sorry lol I don't know why. Perhaps it's a cliché, or maybe I'm just weird. But other than that, I really loved this one. Good job, good job.

    Justin :)
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by IamYourTragedy | [ Reply to This ]
      Its really hard when you say something before you get a chance to actually understand how it is going to affect you and the people around you. I hope everything works out. You did a good job on this piece.

    ~ GothamFreak ~
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by GothamFreak | [ Reply to This ]

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