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    dots Submission Name: Will I Ever Learn?dots
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    Author: GothamFreak
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 110/48/19
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
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    dotsWill I Ever Learn?dots
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    I dissapoint my parents
    after everything they have done for me
    even though they are my life
    will I ever learn?

    I disobey my brother
    even though he wants the best for me
    and even though he's always there for me
    will I ever learn?

    I hurt my best friends
    although I may not know it
    just because I have been hurt by them
    will I ever learn?

    I dont trust myself
    no matter how hard I try
    even though I have God to guide me
    will I ever learn...




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      This was good, and I'm sure a whole lot of other people can relate to this. Especially me. You don't want to hurt others, but sometimes you just can't help it, and you wonder if you'll ever make things right for once. My parents call me a rebel all the time, and I feel like I dissapoint them every day. My older sister is so smart and does everything right, but I'm nothing like her, and I just sometimes ask myself that same question. Will I ever learn?

    Great poem, Piper
    | Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
      The fear of god is the begging of wisdom. Ps 111:10.
    As far as the rest of it goes, just by asking the question is a quest for knowledge. Knowledge easily attained is most often disregarded. However the answer in the midst, is true enlightment. That may guide you through many a cold winter. Certainly keep the patience and in that alone, you will learn a great lesson and all else will be revealed.


    Sincerely Gannondalf aka Big Bear
    | Posted on 2006-07-27 00:00:00 | by Gannondalf | [ Reply to This ]
      I understand this. Maybe not on all aspects...as in the brother part or anything..but I know how it feels to dissapoint my mom even though I love her so much and know I'm dissapointing her...it's crazy how we are and how we never do seem to learn sometimes. But the most we can do is put it in God's hands and have him shape and mold us into what he wants us to be.

    Kris
    | Posted on 2006-07-07 00:00:00 | by Raindrops | [ Reply to This ]
      ayyy nooooo ur like triing to please everyone.
    nahh u know the sayying nothing pleases the people.yeah sooo just worry bout urself and God.
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      This has a alot of courge and dissapointment in it. I can relate to this which is something that attracts me to this work of art.
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by LovesAngel | [ Reply to This ]
      wow you sound really sad in this poem i mean all i can say is try your best and hope everything can go right


    fana
    | Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      This is kind of sad. However, sometimes one may feel that they are doing things incorrect because of surrounding pressure, when they haven't done any thing wrong. I don't believe that anyone can be perfect and everyone has their ups and downs. We must achieve our capabilities and not much more if any.

    I really liked this because of the simplicity behind the message. I see that you have classified this as Random Thoughts and so I am not really going to give you any suggestions. It takes a big person to admit that they are not living life right, and doing things which they shouldn't be.


    Abbas
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]


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