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    dots Submission Name: The Kid in the Lynyrd Skynrd T-shirtdots
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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/122
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       For my brother...and my son


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    dotsThe Kid in the Lynyrd Skynrd T-shirtdots
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    Look at that kid in the Lynyrd Skynyrd t-shirt.
    (We rolled laughing when anyone said /i/who's he?/i./)
    You made me call the radio station a thousand times,
    But we stood in line instead for the Second Helping
    tour with my babysitting money and your lawnmowing money
    crammed in our pockets

    That kid never delivered car parts to buy Nuthiní Fancy;
    He didnít grow his hair out for a year
    And fight bitterly with his father
    for the right to look Van Zant
    Did he mourn when they crashed and burned
    in the Mississippi mud?
    He knows nothing of losing a brother.




    Submitted on 2006-06-28 01:51:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can't say I look at kids in today's generation and laugh when many of them listen to this type of music. I know I do.

    But, regardless to of been there during these times would probably have been priceless and breath taking.

    I know remembering going to concerts when I was younger, way younger than now. Even though I'm not that old and talking to kids now days and hearing them say, "Who?"

    It's a big shocker the first time I heard that one of my younger friends whom I think of as a sister didn't know who Aerosmith was. I almost cried.

    Hehe

    Hey all, I'm just trying to get my reciprocation up. I'm down in the -'s pretty far. So, don't feel the need to comment on my work. I'm trying to get back into the swing of things at Elite. Think of it as a favor from me to you! Thanks for the read!
    <3BCute
    | Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah you got my attention right from the title on the recent posts page... you were my first point of call...

    lynyrd skynrd... i laughed so hard when you had the part in here about you laughing when mother said he should change his name lol... i always thought the same thing haha
    a friend of mine decided one day that since he was a christian that he oughta burn all his heavy metal satan worshipping music and so i went to the burning for emotional support... all our nice conservative christian friends were like "adam is that all of them?" and he was like "all but lynyrd skynrd" and someone was like "well dont you think you oughta burn that one too?" and i almost fell in the fire laughing singing sweet home alabama haha... anyways... this dude has all kindsa places in my world...

    i gotta say though that i got a lil lost after that parenthetic line for a lil bit...
    see... my theory is that outside of the parenthesis should be about the boy in the tshirt and the parts inside parethesis should be about you and your brother... thats my theory so the lines immediately after the parenthesis kinda throw me off every time i read them... but that could be just me...

    i like the way things progress through this piece... from lawnmowing money to a "real" job... from standing in line for hours to growing the hair out for a year... from laughing with mother over some dudes name to arguing with father for rights...

    the last line is a killer...
    im not thinking that its the kids fault that he dont know nothing about losing a brother and i dont think thats what you are trying to pin on him but theres something there...
    i dunno... its not the kids fault he wasnt round back in the day... its kinda like when i was in ethiopia wearing kurt cobain shirts though they had NO idea who he was or what his music sounded like... lol... yup...

    this is a very well written piece...
    im sorry that you do know what its like to lose a brother... some things in life just arent fair and should never happen... but i think in its own way this is a fitting tribute...
    well done.

    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      this is awesome work! you do a wonderful job taking the reader on the journey with you. i wrote a similar piece a couple of years ago when i saw a kid on campus wearing a che guevera t-shirt.

    i can't see anything i'd change - this is great. you should submit it. a fave!

    peace,

    joe
    | Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      I hear you loud and clear! Sometimes I look at these kids today and laugh to my self. They want to be so retro? Like they were there. But what can you do but sit back and laugh! Thanks again for a wonerful write!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      I h ighly agree with the other two here The title got me right away, I was born in the late 80's so I may not have been around for everything but I have an old soul, if fact I perfer Records and Lazer Disks over CDs and DVDs ^_^, so what I saw this I just started cracking up.
    I know all too well what you meant in here, its so sad I see kids all the time (No thanks to Wal-Mart and their vintage fads) with Beatles, Kiss, and Lynard Skinnard t-shirts and I ask them Can You name 7 song by (Insert band name here)? They usually MIGHT know 1. Tis a sad thing indeed. I loved this, and it was definately a fun write to read. Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by Dark Muse | [ Reply to This ]
      im sold right from the title. Im a sucker for anything rock related. This piece has a real since of nostalgia swimming through it and that is what i liked the most. Personally i don't think its bad for a kid to like a band he never experienced first hand. I dont think that makes him a "poser" or anything, like he's some kind of fake fan. Thats ridiculas. Music is timeless, and its always going to be rediscovered rendering those artists who created it, immortal in a way.

    Yet i can see how someone would feel like they had that connection with an artist, experiencing it while it was happening, and years later it would be funny to see a teenager in effect, talking about something he knows nothing about. ALmost gives you a sence of resentment.

    I dont know what im trying to say. Babbling a little i guess. I enjoyed your poem. I love Lynyrd Skynrd, who doesn't?



    great work.



    peace,
    kam
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by Mister Fizzle | [ Reply to This ]
      great title for sure. It definitly jumps out at you.

    its crazy to think about all the different perspectives there are out there.

    A lenerd skin t can have so much meaning. Like it does to you. When I see one I think of free bird, and other random stuff. But when you see one on some kid....whoe. You know.

    Its just crazy to think about what different people can take from something as trite (forgive me if its not trite to you) as a lenard skiner t. But it goes to show you how much we can learn from each other. That is what this made me think about. Very nice, very good.
    | Posted on 2006-07-08 00:00:00 | by leftof_red | [ Reply to This ]


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