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    dots Submission Name: The Accidentdots

    Author: xana
    ASL Info:    17/F/SC
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 34/35/24
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
    Total Views: 1087
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 505

       It's depressing, and sort of dark...tell me what you think

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    dotsThe Accidentdots

    Comming to a sharp stop
    The car was spinning out or control
    The metal rod went through your heart
    You'll never take that final stroll

    You left behind all your friends
    They're mourning now your death
    You had no money - met the ends
    Your life was full of stress

    You drove that car out of control
    Thinking, "it'll end my pain"
    But you forgot the worst of all -
    Your friends are now in pain

    Submitted on 2006-06-28 03:17:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      So true. People are blinded by the pain they feel that they forget the people they leave behind now share in a new pain. This conveys that clearly. A good poem.
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by deafeningsilenc | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed this poem. It seemed like you put a lot of thought and effort into it. I hope that this isn't something that you are considering or had to endure. I think it would be horrible to go through a trama like that. Also, this is the first poem I have read that has been about an accident. Very good job. Keep Writing.
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]

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