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    dots Submission Name: Insanitydots
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    Author: xana
    ASL Info:    17/F/SC
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 34/35/24
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Dark
    Total Views: 853
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    Bytes: 537



    Description:
       I read about this reporter in 1800's and she pretended to be insane to see what life was like in the hospitals. That influenced me to write this poem, tell me what you think.


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    dotsInsanitydots
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    White walls, small space, low cieling
    Is it a surprising you're insane?
    You hurt with all you being
    Do they care that you're in pain?

    They hear your mourns and all your screams
    They put a smile on their face
    The come to you and say "sweet dreams"
    Your dieing in this place.

    And if you're lucky, when you die
    Someone will come and say
    "It's a mistake, this man was sane!"
    But in the grave you'll lie.




    Submitted on 2006-06-28 03:23:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this poem, it's rather interesting and the theme appeals to me. I think that even if most cannot relate to it, they must be able to have an idea of what this person is feeling. Perhaps it could even be symbolic.

    Nice work, interesting to read. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-07-16 00:00:00 | by Mothz | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a very odd poem. I like it a lot. You're right, with all that white and confined spaces, who wouldn't be insane in there? I wonder how many of the people who work there actually go insane themselves. Keep up the good (if slightly odd) work. Boo yah!
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by Lizzy B | [ Reply to This ]
      i hate people saying the same [censored] over and over: "I need u, I love u"

    very glad to see a poem like this, i love it!
    | Posted on 2006-07-04 00:00:00 | by NeverMyWorld | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know about this one. It seems a bit strange and not a lot of people would be able to relate to it. I think that this just wasn't neccesary to put down in writing. Good job for originality but I just don't think it was the best poem ever. Good try though.
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]
      Eh.... i'm insane??? (kiddin) It's kinda wierd...... dark, and it seems mad...
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by lost_alone64 | [ Reply to This ]


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