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    dots Submission Name: Easy Come Easy Godots
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    Author: orpheus
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 188/165/57
    Words: 307
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 1084
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       i guess the older one gets the easier it is to become cynical...God Bless You Who Read This In Jesus' Name :)


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    dotsEasy Come Easy Godots
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    ''Easy come Easy go
    ''Here today Gone tomorrow''

    yo,
    its the dilligent one
    with the militant tongue
    rhyme design shine like
    our brilliant sun
    to help you see Heveans light
    before the villians've won
    killing the love with their hate
    indiscriminate guns change lives
    and ran-sack like Atilla The Hun
    see the villagers run like blood
    they can't stand and fight
    like a smack addict with syringes'n'drugs
    fish-hooked ,fist shook in the streets
    where wisdom is snuffed
    the meek still search
    for lost inheritance
    locked in deficit
    hoppin on the benifit
    never coming out'a their shell
    like a terrapin
    to get shell'd by the terrorists
    expelled by the president
    from their residence
    and never find home
    clever minds know
    why we're seperated zone by zone
    unable to escape the maze
    it's elaborate,ironic
    our man made labyrinth iconic
    so i vomit out the poison
    i'm forced to drink
    on the brink of war again
    find time to forge my ink because it's...

    ''Easy come, Easy go
    ''Here today Gone tomorrow''

    i'm part of the vibrant genre
    the fire starter
    walks the streets
    the target in ultra violet armour
    through a violent karma
    retain my silent honour
    even though the skies are darker
    my mind is sharper
    the diamond edged sword of truth
    cuts the atmosphere
    a rap sincere
    enough to attack the fear
    of those who could'nt do this
    but they still stand and jeer
    i cross the dark chasm
    wade through the sarcasm
    breathe heavily as my heart spasm's
    speak melodies till my art has em
    knocking at the door
    wanting some more
    but it's too late
    this body's taken a different form
    floating through the clouds now
    i'm a spirit at war
    reign flames and watch
    as the cynical fall
    believe you me it's...

    ''Easy come, Easy go
    ''Here today Gone tomorrow''




    Submitted on 2006-06-28 07:45:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It was self explanatory so I'm not going to go in depth on meaning and all that. What I found most impressive were your rhymes. They are not standard and overused. You do use some very common words and phrases, but they are suitible in this piece. You use sounds and syllables as opposed to "love rhymes with dove"... The meter flows so well to the point I could hear it rapped effortlessly (and I'm a rock kind of girl). . . so kudos on creative rhyming and a very effective beat. And as far as the meaning... life is a struggle, and it doesn't seem to be getting easier. I'm with you there. Hope it gets better.
    Jessica
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by parabola | [ Reply to This ]
      its the dilligent one
    with the militant tongue
    rhyme design shine like
    our brilliant sun
    to help you see Heveans light
    before the villians've won
    killing the love with their hate
    indiscriminate guns change lives
    and ran-sack like Atilla The Hun

    i'm part of the vibrant genre
    the fire starter
    walks the streets
    the target in ultra violet armour
    through a violent karma
    retain my silent honour
    even though the skies are darker
    my mind is sharper

    ill [censored] man. but i have read a lot better than u. those lines were really good the way u kept the flow and the internal rhyme. i can't really say much more cuz this one is way too good for me nit pick
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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