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    dots Submission Name: coming homedots
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    Author: Lizzy B
    ASL Info:    17/F/la-la land (MI)
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 79/67/40
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 880
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    dotscoming homedots
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    fifty stars and thirteen stripes
    signify my love for you
    While you're across the seas
    Our love will hold true

    Our love is all
    That hold us together
    Through this war
    It will last forever

    When you finally come
    I am waiting for you
    But you did not come
    As I wished you would do

    After they lower you
    They hand me a flag
    I cry bitterly
    As my knees begin to sag

    I love you my dear
    You know it is true
    You died for your country
    And soon I will join you




    Submitted on 2006-06-28 10:56:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very sweet poem,I truly enjoyed reading it.My entire family has been in the military before and I'm about to go in shortly so I can somewhat relate to this one.It's also touching because of how much compassion I felt when I read it,keep up the good job.
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by Yasou | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really patriotic poem . . . . hahaha. . . but you wrote this very well. When I left South Africa to come to America I felt the exact same way. I missed South Africa and the people there to a great extent. Anyways . . . . great job!

    ~ GothamFreak ~
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by GothamFreak | [ Reply to This ]


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