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    dots Submission Name: With Each Day...dots

    Author: GothamFreak
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 110/48/19
    Words: 32
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1148
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       With every day comes a new beginning and a hurtful end.

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    dotsWith Each Day...dots

    the days fly by
    and with each day comes
    a new sunrise
    flowers blooming
    love blossoming
    friendship heightening
    and success

    with each day comes
    the loss of something you love

    Submitted on 2006-06-28 10:59:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I agree with everything you wrote in that poem. It's very saddening when the things we love go away, of course* but It's wonderful to know that a new day is always on it's way, and new things to love are coming along with it.
    | Posted on 2006-07-29 00:00:00 | by Full Truth | [ Reply to This ]
      thank you so much for your compliments. the poem is very personal and means a lot to me right now and im glad that you enjoyed it. thank you very much

    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by Kimmy | [ Reply to This ]
      Talk about quick contrast. Happiness and hope contrasted with the acknowledgement of an eternal truth. Great poem!
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by deafeningsilenc | [ Reply to This ]
      it's very........ descriptive and ... unique. ( i can't find the word)
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by lost_alone64 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think the simplicity of the poem creates a very powerful meaning. With the words choosen there is a depth and sincerity created.

    p.s. saw you were frustrated with writer's block.... I like to listen to instrumental music and let the pen take me where it will..... don't know if that will help....
    Take care :o)
    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by Cuylia | [ Reply to This ]
      very cool. i liked this. i just thought that like in the first part weher you talk of happy things you should elaborate the loss part a bit too. then it would be a fantastic read. anyways you know better and you have written it with a certain thought in mind. i really liked this.
    | Posted on 2006-07-04 00:00:00 | by bubbasamuel | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this poem. like others have said its short and to the point, but it is obvious there is a lot of emotion behind it too. which i like. excellent piece :)
    poétique harmonie x
    | Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by Poétic Harmonie | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like tis poem, it's short sweet and to the point The contrast makes it really dramatic and emotional. Great job.

    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by xana | [ Reply to This ]
      the days fly by
    and with each day comes
    a new sunrise
    flowers blooming
    love blossoming
    friendship heightening
    and success

    with each day comes
    the loss of something you love

    listen to yourself are you out of your mind i dont understand
    nobodys loosing you you
    i am telling you this because i care even though i dont know you dont become emo it is bad

    let me tell you my friend her name is da grim reeeeeeeeepppppppperrrrrresssssps she is my sister her friend me_emo was emo but now he has understood the path of life and you should too.

    dude this has got to stop
    let me tell you a story about a man and his dog one day they were walking and the man tripped oh yeah the mans name was mike jakson luise stonewell jackson son of mr jackson who died when he was 70.
    let me tell you what happenend this man come up to him and helped him up and said these verses of rummi
    "Life & Death

    look at love
    how it tangles
    with the one fallen in love

    look at spirit
    how it fuses with earth
    giving it new life

    why are you so busy
    with this or that or good or bad
    pay attention to how things blend

    why talk about all
    the known and the unknown
    see how the unknown merges into the known

    why think seperately
    of this life and the next
    when one is born from the last

    look at your heart and tongue
    one feels but deaf and dumb
    the other speaks in words and signs

    look at water and fire
    earth and wind
    enemies and friends all at once

    the wolf and the lamb
    the lion and the deer
    far away yet together

    look at the unity of this
    spring and winter
    manifested in the equinox

    you too must mingle my friends
    since the earth and the sky
    are mingled just for you and me

    be like sugarcane
    sweet yet silent
    don't get mixed up with bitter words

    my beloved grows
    right out of my own heart
    how much more union can there be"

    i think you would like them then he realized he shouldnt be emo any more and he should let his dog free to roam the earth and he became a good man who loved animals and loved everyone who walked apon the earth

    i love this stroy i hope you do too my grandpa told it to me and i hope you pass it on

    well any ways about the poem it was good
    good job theses are some words that describe it






    icy chill

    more good

    better than good

    utty tutty

    last but not least wonderful
    and more

    that concludes my thesseis on your poem

    from a friend

    who cares even though she dosernt know you
    | Posted on 2006-07-09 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is extremely extremely powerful. i like poems which can say everything they need to in a few selective words and you've definitely done that

    Tis sumthing to be proud of

    - Bethy -
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by shambolic | [ Reply to This ]

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