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    dots Submission Name: Swallowing Feelingsdots
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    Author: xana
    ASL Info:    17/F/SC
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 34/35/24
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1014
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 503



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    dotsSwallowing Feelingsdots
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    I swallow my feelings
    Spoon by spoon,
    Different endings
    With different tombs.

    Different people
    All in one space
    Show what they're thinking,
    Forming a place.

    They share together
    The feelings they have.
    Making it easy
    To walk with a staff.

    They know they will meet
    All just too soon,
    But all I can do
    Is swallow my feelings
    Spoon by spoon.






    Submitted on 2006-06-28 13:37:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I absolutely adore your use of 'spoon by spoon'!

    It makes the action seem much more realistic and I could almost picture the ideas you have created!!

    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by shambolic | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved it, spoon by spoon ;)
    | Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by NeverMyWorld | [ Reply to This ]


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