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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Riddle/Misc
    Total Views: 798
    Average Vote:    2.5000
    Bytes: 1014



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       theres prolly only about 2 people that can figure this shit out...

    GOOOD LUCK


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    I try to tell you what I"m feeling/
    but with this subject its hard/
    so I"Ma use metaphors to reel you in/


    (this won't rhyme...its too hard to make exact metaphors and rhyme and make it all fit together...so in your comment tell me what you think I"m trying to say)

    during a windy day J is sailing in the middle of the ocean.
    the wind is blowing him toward land.
    before the wind had greeted him with its presence,
    J had been in a bad situation.
    see, what happened is, J was using paddles, but the paddles broke half way down his trip back to land.
    for days, J wondered is the wind ever going to come and get me out of this situation?
    J was about to give up and jump into the water when the wind finally came.
    after this, J became much happier, and the wind, Although it doesn't speak, or feel, J thinks theres something driving the wind, something which does feel, and does speak.




    Submitted on 2006-06-28 14:14:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Umm... Yeah is this talking about ur friends helping u out and cheering u up about Brit? I don't really know what u r talkin bout exactly but if I had to guess that would be mine. I thought this was pretty good too. Laterz.

    Angel
    | Posted on 2006-07-11 00:00:00 | by ForsakenAngel | [ Reply to This ]
      ok... i have no clue what you were trying to say. but if i had to take a guess... ummm... well, i cant! im lost! sorry.
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by psycotic cowboy | [ Reply to This ]


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