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    dots Submission Name: CHRISTMAS MORNINGdots
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    Author: Psyve
    ASL Info:    53/M/ Bahrain
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 75/102/60
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 859
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 375



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    dotsCHRISTMAS MORNINGdots
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    Train is slow,
    Day is dawning;
    Feeling low,
    Can't stop yawning;
    Four o'clock,
    And I'm still up:
    Christmas morning…

    Dark ringed eyes,
    Didn’t sleep now;
    Quick good-byes,
    I could weep now;
    God, it's cold!
    And I'm told
    It's Christmas morning…




    Submitted on 2006-06-28 15:04:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
       Like most of my lyrics on this board, this one was originally written as a song and, should you care to, you can hear me perform it by clicking on the link below

    http://soundclick.com/share?songid=8999139

    If you do have the patience, I would be very interested to know what you think of it.

    Psyve
    | Posted on 2010-04-16 00:00:00 | by Psyve | [ Reply to This ]


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