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ANGEL


Author: Akai_Ame
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I wrote this just after braking up with the only person i will ever truely love. And i lost him to no one's fault but mine.


ANGEL



~Verse 1~

An angel falls down from heaven.

Lost in awe,

Lost in wonder,

She looks around and thought she had it all.



~Chorus 1~

To be loved

To be wanted

To feel like youre home

To feel that you belong!

___________________________

~Verse 2~

Thought she had found someone.

She believed him to be the one..

But what she never noticed.

When it was all said and done

He was the one who had won.



~Chorus 2~

To have your heart broken

To feel so alone

To feel like youre lost

To feel like youve got nothing left to give!

__________________________

~Verse 3~

All she wanted was loved.

To make others happy.

She gave of her self over and over again.

Just to feel it all slip away.



~Chorus 1~

To be love

To be wanted

To feel like youre home

To feel that you belong!

_______________________

~Verse 4~

Now all she does is cry.

Wishing and hoping,

To once again die.

Looking for something to take the pain away.

Just as long as she feels sane.



~Chorus 3~

Someone to love

Someone to hold.

Someone to give everything you had to.

_______________________

~Verse 5~

And angel goes back to heaven

Lost in sorrow

Lost in tears

Wondering, what else could go wrong..

Tomorrow.





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  hmm.....after a long time ... something held my attention ....This piece is very well structured, makes for an interesting read....

I was really able to identify with the angel's grief...

But ...shudn ' it be - to be Loved 'instead of to be love..?

I am going to add this to my fav's because of the content and how I can clearly relate to the grief of someone else other than me...

Its just goes to show how many more angels suffer in this world...just the way I did...well written..
| Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by Sophia | [ Reply to This ]
  very emotive. i'm sorry that you've had to expierence this level of despair, but it's a part of life i guess, finding and losing love, it shows us how to respect and truly keep love alive within ourselves.... and now you have an appreciation for that time spent with him more than ever now...maybe someday after time, you can reconcile, until then...
Selah
| Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by Oracle | [ Reply to This ]
  hmm.....after a long time ... something held my attention ....This piece is very well structured, amkes for an interesting read....

I was really able to identify with the angel's grief...

But ...shudn ' it be - to be Loved 'instead of to be love..?

I am going to add this to my fav's because of the content and how I can clearly relate to the grief of someone else other than me...

Its just goes to show how many more angels suffer in this world...just the way I did...well written..
| Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by Sophia | [ Reply to This ]
  hmm.....after a long time ... something held my attention ....This piece is very well structured, makes for an interesting read....

I was really able to identify with the angel's grief...

But ...shudn ' it be - to be Loved 'instead of to be love..?

I am going to add this to my fav's because of the content and how I can clearly relate to the grief of someone else other than me...

Its just goes to show how many more angels suffer in this world...just the way I did...well written..
| Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by Sophia | [ Reply to This ]


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