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    Author: Persephone
    ASL Info:    19/f/ US
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 328/352/136
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1419
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       I was ditched by some friends, and this is how I felt. I wanted to tell someone, but no one was home...


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    She sits on her bed,
    waiting for her friends to show,
    but they never really do,
    and she won't get up and go.

    Somehow she can't give up on them,
    not like they seemed to give up on her,
    She couldn't just forget like that,
    she won't be a quitter.

    Isn't that what she'd be?
    Giving up on her friends?
    Giving up on her hopes of them?
    Is it not better to wait till the end?

    In her hearts, she knows their not coming back,
    She doesn't need them to tell her this,
    She knows it, even if she doesn't think so,
    it's written in their words, on their very lips.

    They never called her their friend,
    she was useful and in need,
    something to take away the boredom,
    A way to nuture their insecurity.

    And as she comes to realize all of this,
    She looks out her window from her seat,
    Looking for some trace of them,
    But she will not rise, but waits forever at her seat.




    Submitted on 2006-06-28 22:11:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      They never called her their friend,
    she was useful and in need,
    something to take away the boredom,
    A way to nuture their insecurity.


    I love this verse the most, I found some of it didn't have as good a rhythm as other parts, but, as you have said to me, it is probably down to accents etc. I very much enjoyed the write though.
    Frann. x
    | Posted on 2006-10-02 00:00:00 | by Effee | [ Reply to This ]
      my friends are fake! ive not seen them for 4 and a half weeks, this is how i feel, but im no longer waiting, ive moved on, got some new ones, i like the poem lots.
    | Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by ellesmera | [ Reply to This ]
      It can be devistating which should enjoy life to the fullest decide to cut some one out of the picture.

    THis kid of thing has happend in the past to me. Where its hard to do things with people now adays when a group activity doesn't involve beer.

    At times I wish the word aquiontance could be replaced by chump.

    But take solice in the fact that you of sound mind are a strong person and can look beyond the shalow pleasures of the weak willed.

    Unicrom
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by Unicrom | [ Reply to This ]
      Karen I love you! Now I feel bad all over again. I'm sorry that I had to work and that I couldn't come. Soo...good poem though. It makes me sad, like a lot of them, which is good because it gets to me. ~jennah
    | Posted on 2006-07-03 00:00:00 | by jennah | [ Reply to This ]
      This was an awesome poem. I've had this happen to me before . . . . for me it was funny . . . . . . when they finally showed. While I was waiting for them I was pissed off. . . but then they explained what happened. Anyways . . . You wrote this very well and I like all the imagery that you used.

    ~ Gotham Freak ~
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by GothamFreak | [ Reply to This ]


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