For Mom and Dad by Mr. Creep

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Submission Name: For Mom and Dad dots

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Author:	Mr. Creep
ASL Info:	16. Female. Here
Elite Ratio:	1.97 - 96/177/112
Words:	114

Class/Type:	Misc/I hate you
Total Views:	1122
Average Vote:	5.0000
Bytes:	653

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For Mom and Dad dots

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I just want to leave
I dont want to interrupt you
I have to get out of here
Or I might have to hurt you

Go away now
I see you are dying
and it pisses me off
That the whole world is dying

Why are we here
keeps running through my mind
I hope a bullet dosent slip!
keeps running through my mind

You never trusted me
or at least I never knew it
You never belived in me
but I found my way through it

I will leave now
so you dont have to worry
I will kill myself now
so you dont have to worry

Submitted on 2006-06-28 23:29:07 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
  I think the 2nd person isn't that smart. "pissed off" describes your feelings in a great way because so many people say it nowadays.

A devoted fan,
FreeBird
| Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by FreeBird | [ Reply to This ]
  Great. I loved how you used the same word in every stanza for line two and four. Greatness at it's bestest. :D Haha, good job.
-Missy
| Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by Pabapfc | [ Reply to This ]
  great, deep and true. i would just not ruin a serious poem with "pissed off"
| Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by NeverMyWorld | [ Reply to This ]
  hey, nice job!!! keep it up :)
| Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by mrmundane | [ Reply to This ]

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