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    dots Submission Name: For Mom and Daddots
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    Author: Mr. Creep
    ASL Info:    16. Female. Here
    Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96/177/112
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Misc/I hate you
    Total Views: 1082
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 653



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    dotsFor Mom and Daddots
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    I just want to leave
    I dont want to interrupt you
    I have to get out of here
    Or I might have to hurt you

    Go away now
    I see you are dying
    and it pisses me off
    That the whole world is dying

    Why are we here
    keeps running through my mind
    I hope a bullet dosent slip!
    keeps running through my mind

    You never trusted me
    or at least I never knew it
    You never belived in me
    but I found my way through it

    I will leave now
    so you dont have to worry
    I will kill myself now
    so you dont have to worry




    Submitted on 2006-06-28 23:29:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think the 2nd person isn't that smart. "pissed off" describes your feelings in a great way because so many people say it nowadays.

    A devoted fan,
    FreeBird
    | Posted on 2006-10-01 00:00:00 | by FreeBird | [ Reply to This ]
      Great. I loved how you used the same word in every stanza for line two and four. Greatness at it's bestest. :D Haha, good job.
    -Missy
    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by Pabapfc | [ Reply to This ]
      great, deep and true. i would just not ruin a serious poem with "pissed off"
    | Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by NeverMyWorld | [ Reply to This ]
      hey, nice job!!! keep it up :)
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by mrmundane | [ Reply to This ]


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