death will kiss my lips tonight,
as i dream about heaven,
and there will be no way to take flight,
and go beyond oblivion...
| That was relly short. but perfectly awsome.|
short is good for deep.
|| Posted on 2006-11-12 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ] || This was a very good start to something great. It seem rather short to me, so I would encourage you to add more to this. I would also suggest that you keep as a free verse of you do add more to this. This has alot of potential. |
|| Posted on 2006-07-03 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ] || I was trying to think about what needs to be improved on this, but in general I really liked it. The first two lines were my favorite.||| Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by TheYoungWolf | [ Reply to This ] || This is really true|
I believe you are referring to how with Life with God in your Life you have nothing to Fear
The Love of The Lord is the strongest Love ever
His Love can and Will save you from Negativity
It has happenend to me and I know this as a fact
Very Nicely worded Brandon
I look forward to reading more writes from you
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
|| Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ] |