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    dots Submission Name: Caffeine Addictdots
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    Author: coyote
    ASL Info:    57/Male/Nevada
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 71/56/28
    Words: 240
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    This very morning when I awoke I thought someone had played a joke. I checked the pot, it was bone dry. I checked the pantry and started to cry...no coffee!

    So I got dressed for work--real slow. I had no drive, no pep, no go. I drove to work, barely awake. I wanted to stop but I was already late...no coffee!

    I parked the car and walked inside, but when I got the news I almost died. The vendor took the machine away, and it damned sure won't be back today...no coffee!

    The boss said that we should not worry; he'd send for caffeine in a hurry...but when it arrived, in thermos bright, it seemed to lack the usual bite of coffee.

    No Columbian or Kona Blend, nor even French Roast dwelt within, It was a mix--exotic flavors, that only yuppie scum could savor...not coffee!

    A mocha-chino-berry stink that no one in that crowd would drink. That morning dragged incessantly, and no one acted pleasantly...no coffee!

    When lunch time came we fled the scene of the luke-warm, slurpy, berry thing--we marched down to the restaurant and told the waitress. "All we want is coffee!"

    By end of day no-one was tired. The caffeine high had everyone wired. I've learned the lesson, oh so well, that without coffee life is hell. And I'm an addict, monster, fiend, and slave unto the coffee bean...yeah, coffee!




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      I am not a coffee addict, but addict or not... that was just an awesome peice of work! The quick pace of the rythym seems to reitterate the anxious frustration of wanting that fix... there are a few words here and there I maybe woulda changed a bit to make it roll a little smoother, but that's just me. The Mocha-chino-berry stink!!! LOOOOOOOOVE IT!!! The whole thing was funny and brightened my overall mood. Thanks much!!
    | Posted on 2006-10-03 00:00:00 | by kiddo13 | [ Reply to This ]
      Coyote,

    Nice go!

    I share a passion and addiction for the dark and bitter brew. You tell this well. It stikes quite near home.

    This might make a great taking blues tune.

    I like it a lot.

    Chrystine
    | Posted on 2006-09-02 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
      I giggled reading this because I understood it so well. What a horrible world it would be without coffee :). I love the bit about Mocha-chino-berry stink! I don't have any constructive criticism (I'm not good at that anyway) I might have chosen a few of the words differently, but I don't think it is a matter of right and wrong-just personal style so I won't get into that. I really enjoyed it because it was different and very true.
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by laursal | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it. I know exactly what you mean without caffeinne I couldn't make it through the day. I love the line

    So I got dressed for work--real slow. I had no drive, no pep, no go

    When my mom doesn't get her afternoon coke you can tell because you'll start to talk to her and before you get a chance to finish the sentence she's out in la la land. The world would burn up if caffeine disapeared. What would we do without it.
    THis is a hilarious poem.
    pEAcE
    liz
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by smartblond | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good and humerous
    I too ahve a severe addiction to caffeine
    I drink a two litter bottle of mountain dew a day and also a 24 ounce can of Jolt every day
    I used to have a speed addiction for 5 years but Thank God I am now one year sober
    Without Caffeine I dont think Id ever get out of bed
    I liked the way you wrote this
    Great Job
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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