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    dots Submission Name: Rooftop Lullaby's and Seductiondots
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    Author: teenage_dirtbag
    ASL Info:    18 || female || tennessee
    Elite Ratio:    4.12 - 113/103/39
    Words: 296
    Class/Type: Rant/Love
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    i lost myself in your eyes, that shined brighter than the stars floating above us. what made me think you were telling the truth? what made me think you were any different? i told you i'd regret it and you told me there was nothing to regret. and although i barely knew you, i felt a tinge of something magical, soemthing so honest and convincing. somehow you exhuberated and aura of innocence and truth... how was i to know you'd be the worst of them yet? now three weeks down the road i'm left feeling helpless and used, and you know what... i regret it. your mere presence used to make me happy... now the thought of your existance makes me cringe. but no matter how much i hate you... i can't help but want you. i let the rooftop sing me a lullaby of seduction that night, now i have to live with the consequences. i let myself be fooled and now my heart is paying the price... not only am i broken but i'm alone. the one person who made the pain go away before has cause new pain and that's what hurts the most. how could you sit there in front of me and feed me all that bullshit about my beauty and loving myself for who i am, knowing it was all lies? how could you sit there and pretend to pour your heart out to me about how she hurt you when she was the one at home crying over you? i pity you michael rigsby... i really do. i don't know what made you think heart's were toys... but they're not... and someday you'll get a dose of your own medicine and i hope it makes you feel like dying.




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      This was expressive, it was emotional, it was described very well and it flowed naturally, it was really good and didn't feel at all forced. I like the originality of it.
    I'm really sorry you feel like that, people are so often fools in love that we don't realise that we are just fools, we are not in love. We are mistreated and we feel like our hearts are broken and it seems like no one around you cares. I love how you made it clear in this that the person you wanted to make the pain go away was the person who had caused you the pain in the first place, or at least that's what I got from the lines- 'the one person who made the pain go away before has cause new pain'
    Those lines just give the feeling of counting on someone to be there for you and then they are the ones who cause you pain, it's sad, really tragic.
    So I really liked this, it proofs rambling can have a direction and be really good.
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by Sagirlie | [ Reply to This ]


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