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    dots Submission Name: Foldsdots
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    Author: S.A.M.
    ASL Info:    26/f/xx
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 476/419/137
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 603
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1256



    Description:
        This is by Storm one of my friends. He is no longer able to get on the site so I am posting some of his work he sends to me. Comment please, I will pass them on.


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    dotsFoldsdots
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    Rearrange my brain
    force me to change
    play your mind games
    to me its all the same

    With Folds in time
    Cracks in my mind
    tell me what you want
    tell me what you want
    yeah ---

    Strangers in my head
    monsters under my bed
    one half is a saint
    the other filled with taint

    With Folds in time
    Cracks in my mind
    tell me what you want
    tell me what you want
    smack my brain
    till I'm insaine
    yeah

    the screaming circumfrance
    keeps me in like a fence
    not your cattle to keep
    not the saviour you seek

    With Folds in time
    Cracks in my mind
    tell me what you want
    tell me what you want
    beat my brain till I'm insane
    in the end it's all the same
    yeah ---
    Folds in time
    breaking cracks in my mind
    tell me what you want
    tell me what you want
    beat my brain till I'm insane
    in the end it's all the same
    yeah ---

    Out of time, out of my mind
    tell me what you want
    tell me what you want
    yeah ---




    Submitted on 2006-06-29 06:51:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well i'm guessing this is a song perhaps? I like how he builds upon the repetition, steadily creating the final climax...
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by Jakirina | [ Reply to This ]


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