Description: Hi all, sorry for one month of absence, I was taking my last school High school exams
This poem is about me in my last exam. It was a mechanics (statics and dynamics) exam and It
was unsolvable (May be it was from another curriculum).
The paper is white -------------------------------------------
The paper is white
Is that right!
What should I write?
Nothing went right
The paper is white
No answer in my mind
No booklet in my sight
Options extents are lined
The paper is white
Asked about forces and plane
Answering "It deserve no pain"
Theories are not in my brain
Is this poem finished? It didn't seem finished to me, with the last line just being left open like it was...just a particular i'm used to is a period...sry. Anyway, I liked this, I could definitly feel something like stress coming out of this poem. There were some area's though...
"Answering "It deserve no pain""
Should there be an 's' at the end of deserve?
Also in this line theres double 's' endings one right after another, it made the flow faulter a bit...
"Options extents are lined"
Other then that, your rhyme scheme was all right. It was actually pretty good, like the rhyme's weren't too obvious, but I'm just not one for rhyme's usually.
What can I say, this was rather confusing, the repetitive approach didn't quite work to your favor. I liked how it was different from other poems I have read, i give you props for uniqueness.
Submission Name: The paper is white
