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    dots Submission Name: Sick and Tireddots
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    Author: Poeticprincess
    ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333/325/104
    Words: 368
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 764
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 2252



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    dotsSick and Tireddots
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    i use to sit and talk about
    how i'm just for show
    i loved u to death
    but then again u don't know
    and u use to treat me like i was
    something u just don't want
    but now i'm tired of it all
    i'm not about to front
    now i'm here
    thinking bout the shit u say
    if u really wanna leave (leave)
    i'm not here to make u stay
    if u really wanna go
    pack your bags be on your way
    i'm not gonna take this no more from you
    be on your way

    cause i'm sick and tired
    of u tellin me i'm wrong
    ur a boy not a man
    i need someone whose strong
    playin me like a game
    i'm not taking it no more
    so if u wanna leave (leave)
    go ahead walk out the door

    my friends would say
    kick him out he's doing u wrong
    but i would shake my head
    and tell 'em that u were strong
    and now i'm sitting here
    thinkin about this relationship
    ur the one that let it go
    i'm through with your shit
    and now i'm here
    thinking bout that shit u say (say)
    if u really wanna leave (leave)
    i'm ain't gonna make u stay (oh no)
    if u really wanna go
    i'll pack your bags so u'll on your way
    i'm so sick and tired of you
    it ends today

    cause i'm sick and tired
    of u tellin me i'm wrong
    ur a boy not a man
    i need someone whose strong
    playin me like a game
    i'm not taking it no more
    so if u wanna leave (leave)
    go ahead walk out the door

    i use to cry sometimes
    i use to ask myself
    why u do me wrong
    was it somebody else
    but now i realize
    that i really don't have to cry
    you gotta leave (oh oh oh)

    cause i'm sick and tired
    of u tellin me i'm wrong
    ur a boy not a man
    i need someone whose strong
    playin me like a game
    i'm not taking it no more
    so if u wanna leave (leave)
    go ahead walk out the door





    Submitted on 2006-06-29 10:16:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this one was ok. the verses weren't really that hot but i was definitely feeling the hook. i don't know how i would change it though.
    | Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      this is good, and if you want me on the remix, then I'll get my ass on the remix!...just one question whats my role gonn be on here
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]


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