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No Point


Author: Akai_Ame
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I wrote this a little while ago. I can slowly feel life slipping through my fingures and no matter what i do i can't stop it. I am ruining my own life, one small step at a time. I just feel like there isn't a point in fighting to stay where you feel so damn lost.


No Point



How could I have been so wrong?

Why can I never do anything right?

Im torn between a life of tears,

And a life of hidden pain.



But both are one and the same it seems.

Its hard to have one with out the other.

I want to make him happy, want so hard to please him.

But it would appear, my heart does nothing but hope for dreams.



Dreams of what could be.

Dreams of happiness.

Dreams of a life with the one I love with my soul.

That I love with every broken, shattered piece of my heart.



But dreams will get me nowhere in this life of nightmares.

Ill never have happiness.

Never feel the warmth of his love.



The sun in my life will never shine again.

The moon will never rise.

Whats the point of such a life?

A life with no hope,

With not passion.



Thats just it.

Without hope, without passion, there IS no point.

No point...

No point..

Not even one.



I wish i could say, everything i've ever ment to...

But there where be no point.

All i wish to state,

Is i'm sorry,

I truely love you

and

Forgive me.






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  i know and feel the meaning of this poem. I think it was done very well. it reminds me of something in my past.... but at anyrate it was great.


Hollira
| Posted on 2006-08-08 00:00:00 | by Hollira Revile | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really sad
I know this feeling all too well
It sound like you are making the same mistake I made for so long
Youi are blaming yourself for the relationship not working
Please dont do that as if you look carefuilly at thre relationship you will definately see thats just not true
Also as you look deeply at the relationship find the positive to every negative and that positive will carry you to all your dreams
Please trust me on this
I know it sounds so simple but im living proof it works
God Bless
Your Friend
Ron
| Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  "But dreams will get me nowhere in this life of nightmares."


This was the one line that really stuck out for me. It might as well has been in big bold red type for me. I hope things go well.

*tox*
| Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this one and it is very interesting. But you know, there is always a point in moving forward in life. Life isn't something that you should ever really just give up. Just because one relationship with someone fails, it doesn't mean that there aren't many others who are willing to build you up when you fall. There are alot of us who are willing to build you up. I know I would want to. So you have to keep moving forward, and get up when you've been knocked down, because your friends will always cheer you on. So keep writing to ease your pain and never forget that life is too important to give up on because the pain only makes the good times better. Love ya! -Kenji
| Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by Kenji Light | [ Reply to This ]


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