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    dots Submission Name: Two Amazing Yearsdots
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    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 559
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       Today is the two year anniversary of my marriage. I wrote this for my husband while on my lunch break at work yesterday. All I wanted to express here was my love for him and how much I need him through everyday. I don't really care if it isn't up to par for everyone else lol, this is for my Jon.


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    I do not want to know,
    Where I would be today,
    If we had never met,
    And went our seperate ways.

    Without you here beside me,
    Through all the grief and pain,
    My demons would have killed me,
    And nothing would remain.

    I thank God in heaven everyday,
    You chose to let our love shine,
    A love so wonderful and deep,
    It could not have been designed.

    Over the past two years,
    We have cried and laughed together.
    We've worked through many problems,
    And survivied the worst weather.

    Today on our anniversary,
    Our love is stronger than before,
    It grows with every passing second,
    So marvelous it cannot be ignored.

    The day I said my vows,
    I gave to you my heart.
    I will love you forever, Jon.
    Until death, do us part.




    Submitted on 2006-06-29 13:31:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is incredibly touching, and a wonderfully evocative testement to your love for Jon. He is lucky to have someone who can emote the way you do, as you express every feeling with a sincerety and...yeah love. lol too many loves I know, but hey this isn't gramma class...lol Anyway, yes it is a beautiful little poem and that final stanza ties it all up with the most powerful of vows. Rhyming is a little clumsy in places but to be honest it's truly irrelevant, as the emotion is what shines, and it's almost blinding :D Great stuff.
    | Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by Legandor | [ Reply to This ]
      OMG This is amazing and it puts this warmth in my heart. It was beautifully written and I am so happy that there is true love in this world. Congrats on your two years and I hope that you have many more....

    <3 Adalae
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by lifeNsoul1224 | [ Reply to This ]
      Your words are beautiful in their open sincerity. I have to say, when i read it i undersood every word if only because i was relating to my own life and marrige. Anyhow, Best of Luck in life !
    | Posted on 2006-07-16 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a beautiful poem, it's so sincere and says beautiful things. I think it truly expresses your feelings towards your husband and your marriage. You described beautifully what marriage is about, every line shows how thankful you are. My favorite stanza is the second one. Well done!!!

    XoXo
    Gaby
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by Lost_Delirious | [ Reply to This ]


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