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    dots Submission Name: so much to try fordots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 647/1206/773
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsso much to try fordots
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    i could die so easy with so much to die for
    but i could fight just as easy
    would you cry if i left you?
    because i dont want to fight anymore

    whats all this talk about the wheels spinning, and clocks ticking, and gears turning?
    why cant we just say its almost over?
    soon it will be over
    then where will we be?

    i could leave because leavings easy
    but would you cry if i left you?
    just turned on the heel of my torn up shoes
    and hopped out in my no-label black hoodie, and ripped beyond recognition jeans
    why is everything about me undefinable?
    maybe i dont want you to remember

    i could lie so easy with so many secrets to hide
    but maybe truths can save me this time
    or maybe ill be strangled by my freedom
    i dont want to anger honesty
    so i guess i wont say anything
    and hate everything

    i could die so easy, if i werent busy leaving or lying
    but why cant i try with so much to try for?




    Submitted on 2006-06-29 14:19:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yea, see i think of other things but then i read what someone else thought it was and then i see it...yea it was a good poem and easily relatable.
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by ollie_wicked | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I never thought of death this way. I love the wording, but you could use a little work on the flow. I really like the feeling. Keep up the good work. Boo yah!
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by Lizzy B | [ Reply to This ]


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