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    dots Submission Name: I"m sorrydots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotsI"m sorrydots
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    to my peoples, I'm sorry for the shit I put you through/
    to my girls, I"m sorry for the shit I made you do/
    stayin up with me, late when I was on pills/
    I can't describe to you how wrong this all feels/
    to B, I'm sorry for when I hit you, I know I was high/
    but I still feel bad, thats why I kissed your eye/
    thats the reason I stopped that shit/
    never hurt my girls, so dropped that shit/
    to all the people I've fucked over/
    in the course of my life/
    this is the reason I"m now sober/
    I feel like the anti-christ/
    with severed wings, falling from the sky/
    from my past comes lingering, all of my passed highs/
    useless! the way I'm feeling/
    I"ma cut these chains now, so soon I'll be healing/




    Submitted on 2006-06-29 18:54:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i relly liked this
    becauses its kinda like how my year was
    i was into drugs heavily and then sobered up.
    good job
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]
      This was good i mean for real. Like it was idk deppressing but there's a light at the end of it. Nice to see that some guys do say i'm sorry 'cause some guys don't. But anyways i'm feelin this alot.

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    | Posted on 2006-07-02 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this, it takes a lot sometimes to admit that you need to stop what you're doing and that it's hurting other people, I know what it's like to be on the opposite end of what you described specifically but at the same time I always feel like there are a hell of a lot of things that I need to be sorry for so I get what you're saying from kinda both points of view, but I dunno how to critique this one because it was so personal that I couldn't even begin to suggest how you could have 'improved' it or how I would have written it.
    peace && luv,
    ~jess
    | Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm really proud of the people who look at what they're doing and how it's effecting others...i really respect you for quiting...
    it was a very personal write so i can't relate but i feel that you're sorry...so good write.
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by ollie_wicked | [ Reply to This ]
      hey bubz ive bin in the recieving end of this type of violence, i never got a sorry tho. its good to here ur steppin up, and i loved this,
    keep em cummin babe,
    kyrenia
    | Posted on 2006-07-03 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]


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