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    dots Submission Name: betrayaldots
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    Author: Lizzy B
    ASL Info:    17/F/la-la land (MI)
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 79/67/40
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 855
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       All cheating hearts should die. This is what I believe.


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    dotsbetrayaldots
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    We seemed so happy
    And then you hurt me
    It went for so long
    How could I not see?

    You were seeing her
    How did I not know?
    I thought you loved me
    Like I loved you so

    I found you with her
    You weren't expecting me
    You didn't know I was there
    Until you heard me scream

    I stood in the doorway
    And watched you kiss her
    I heard my heart break
    It'll never ment, I'm sure.




    Submitted on 2006-06-29 19:18:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice poem, this seems to happen a lot today, you captured the essence very nicely from a girls point of view, and very true to the point. But a few grammar errors that could be cleaned up.
    -Xingu
    | Posted on 2007-04-16 00:00:00 | by xingu32 | [ Reply to This ]
      hey thats good. keep at it!!
    | Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by butterflygirl27 | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww. . . this is so sad. If this is from your true life, I am sorry this happend to you. It was a good pice though. Keep on writing. And I hope you find a better guy.

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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