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One day closer...


Author: Perpetualdreamz
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My boyfriend is leaving for the summer..it would have been our first summer together..and he suddenly had to leave becoz of his sick grandmother...I'm going ot be so sad...I dunno what to do with myself...it's going to distract me from summer school...someone help me I want to hug him..and hold him tightly so he can never leave...


One day closer...



One day closer til I can talk to you...
One day closer til I can hug you...
One day closer til I can hear your heart beat...


One day closer til we can be together again.

There's still one more day until you leave.




Submitted on 2006-06-29 20:55:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hello there. I believe I may have encountered this same problem as you. My girlfriend went off to work at a summer camp 16 days ago, and wont be back until late august. Two months away from her... this is maddening! So believe me, I can totally relate.

In my case, she left on her own will. She chose to work there, and left me here. Well, that's a really bitter way to put that, and I wont lie, there was a long time where I was really bitter about it. In your case it sounds like he has to go, for a very sad reason. I totally know what you mean about wanting to just hold them... but yah know... if you're in this relationship for the right reasons, then you just have to live through it. It's your first summer together, but, if this is something you want to last, think of all the summers to come. Your being asked to give him up for one summer, think of all the time you'll still have though. This is really going to help your relationship grow. Believe me.

One day more before...

Counting down, it makes the time go faster. It makes it feel faster anyway. Get distractions. Think of happy memories. My heart really goes out to--its no fun having to sit behind. But, it's something you must do.

Justin :)
| Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by IamYourTragedy | [ Reply to This ]
  E-mail is a quick fix, but nothing can beat long sweet letters. They aren't warm, like a hug, but you can re-read them over and over and they're like listening to your loved one speak to you.

Hang in there. The summer will be over before you know it.

You didn't ask for critique on your poem, but I just wanted to say it was very well done. When I read your description, I was expecting some young-sounding mushy piece full of clichés (sorry), but that isn't what I saw at all. Very nicely done. mae
| Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by mae | [ Reply to This ]


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