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    dots Submission Name: Death Knocking At My Windowdots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsDeath Knocking At My Windowdots
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    I hear death scratching at my window,
    And I don't know what it wants,
    My soul seems terryfied from the tingle
    When the scratching turns into a chant.

    I hear death in my twisted reality,
    It makes my life turn in circles,
    And I feel there's nothing but equality
    When you feel the thrill;
    From death's tickles.

    I hear death at my window,
    And I don't know what to do,
    All my life I've felt this rumble
    And I know for a fact death's true.

    I see death in my reflection,
    Life is only a constant collateral,
    In the best of my intentions,
    Though nothing's promised,
    I face my worse fear;
    And fight death
    In a match that's supernatural.





    Submitted on 2006-06-29 21:44:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      to fight death in a supernatral round is just wrong bro. i used to be the same way as you and everybody else....fearing death, so we stand up to it. in the end Death will win, though though may have the courage to stand against it, thou shall never have the power to overcome it. thats why i want death more than ever. though this God may be the most powerful and his enemy Satan may be the wrong path, nobody knows where this fearful Death stands at on the line. wanna know why i trust Death and not God? cuz like i said over and over again, death is one that is feared. Fear is accually a friend that is simply misunderstood bro. you get me? well, i left my two cents and now i'm out!
    -Thief
    | Posted on 2006-12-08 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]
      This is intersting to say the least, and it has an eiree deepness to it. It's good. I really liked it. I'm not exctly sure of the meaning you ment though. Is it that death is always there waiting for you? I really like the first two lines of the last stanza. Great write. Keep on writing.

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]
      a clear enough message, in a clear kind of way.. it has a lot of potential. I would work on the flow though. The rythem of it is off so the rhyming doesn't flow right. and too many I's.
    | Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]


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