Description: i just like to think about how our body works...
to me it's CRAZY that without one tiny part that our body wouldn't function...
sorry if it bored you.
no rhyming intended.
Only in times of true dispare
Do i find comfort in being here.
Its in these times I often find,
that life is most precious.
I feel my heart as it recerculates my already
bring oxygen to my muscles.
I see my chest rise and fall for air
i feel the cool air
no matter how warm
in my throat it's always cold.
it fills my lungs.
reminding me that without it
i couldn't feel the simple pleasure
of feeling it.
this air and this blood
that make me feel life.
The kind of depth of thought that's within this poem is what makes for great poetry. There are a few misspellings that could be easily fixed if you run the poem through a spell checker. I enjoyed this read, Sharon :-)
This is real good I never quite looked at life the way you described it in this write But you speak so true Life is a number of important elements that fit perfectly together The human body is the most perfect machine in the world Great Job with this I look forward to reading more writes from you God Bless Ron
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think Thank You Ron
hhmmm...thats interesting...i never seriously broke it down like that. i mean, i knew blood and air give us life (health 101) but i never really thought about it in terms other than that diagram (u know the one, with the muscles and the insides and such). i think this is really cool. this is my favorite line: reminding me that without it/i couldn't feel the simple pleasure/of feeling it. i thought this was really awesome so keep it up!!
crap..it occured to me ive said nothing about the poem and thats certainly not right because it was a dandy poem and deserved more attention in the comment..my bad. argh.. it was a dandy poem.. nothing wrong that i noticed..