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Perfect Love


Author: newbee
ASL Info:    15/m/toronto
Elite Ratio:    2.21 - 22 /19 /8
Words: 45
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Perfect Love



My love for you is just right

not hotter than fire nor colder than ice

not harder than stone or softer than a feather

not bigger than the world or smaller than a flea

just perfect for you and me.




Submitted on 2006-06-30 11:25:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  aww... that was really cute!! nice job!
| Posted on 2006-08-08 00:00:00 | by od9.1.04 | [ Reply to This ]
  this is..sweet. I like how you've changed the comparisons around about love...most people would say it IS hotter than fire etc. And all i can think of, is this is just so..real..and so sweet. It's like saying, Listen our love may not be perfect, it may not have neverending fireworks made from the hand of God, but this love is just right for me. This love is perfect For Me

I'm sorry I dont really know what to say other than nice job keepin it real
| Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
  A very simple & short piece but it says so much.... this is lovely. I'm not going to repeat the usual (well written, nicely done, blah, blah). It's a good piece & I enjoyed the read.
Thanks for sharing.
:)
Tonya
| Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by Tonya V. | [ Reply to This ]
  I love how this poem shows the imperfections in this love that you have, yet it's just so perfect for you. It's almost that comfortable but very real love, without being overbearing and all consuming. I really like that a great deal. You really did express a great deal, without having to be overly wordy and fake about it. This is a very believable piece. Great job!

Candi
| Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
  hey
i liked is it about someone cause if it is they should read it its cute

amber
| Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by Amberger | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this
I like the simplicity of this write
You got your point across perfect and didnt fall into the trap a lot of poets do of having to stress words and use big words they have never heard of before just to make an impact
You didnt have to do that you just expressed what you felt and you did it perfectly
Excellent Job!!!
God Bless
Ron

Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
Ron
| Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  Well so far this is my favorite. I like your thinking behind theis, rather than plain emotion, you've thought about describing how you feel.

Nicely done, I liked it.

be happy

Graeme
| Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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