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    dots Submission Name: * Why?dots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
    Total Views: 983
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    dots* Why?dots
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    Why do I feel this way?
    Why should you matter so much to me?
    What have you done ?
    Look at me,
    I donít know what to do.
    I donít know how to control my feelings.
    I am so confused,
    I want to run.
    Run from my feelings for you,
    Run from your feelings for me,
    What are my feeling for you?
    And what are your feeling for me?
    I need to know!
    Will you tell?
    Do you trust me?
    I hope you do.
    Why do I hope that you trust me?
    Why should I care so much?
    Why do I feel like this?




    Submitted on 2006-06-30 13:12:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this poem. I think that the way you introduced the questions without answering them makes the poem much more honest, because we have all been in that situation, and no matter what the outcome of the readers situation the reader can relate. The only thing i would change is the ending because it makes the poem feel pointless by ending the same way as it begins. Once again good job, keep up the good work

    Selene
    | Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]
      Random indeed. This was sad and heartfelt, but inconsistent. It was really powerful and emotional in some places while in the others, it wasn't. I liked the idea of asking questions at first, but later into the poem, I began feeling that you had overdone it a little. However, I have no nitpicking to do in this one.


    Abbas
    | Posted on 2006-07-07 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
      i feal you in the words you have written and i like the questions you have put. (plz cheak mine)
    | Posted on 2006-07-05 00:00:00 | by draconus | [ Reply to This ]
      this isn't one of my favorites but its pretty good and it just seem to me like to many questions
    and not enough awnsers. Like maybe there is to much of confusion. I wouldn't have asked so may questions without the awnsers. (but thats just me) But its still a good write so maybe work on it and keep writing
    | Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by LovesAngel | [ Reply to This ]


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