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Unconscious minds


Author: vanhokinshtyl
ASL Info:    8/M/UK
Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 119 /200 /71
Words: 172
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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This kinda goes along with 'this is not a human's work'...'

Enjoi.


Unconscious minds



With mind's like paintings to the ear,
Things you can't see you can hear
If you listen...
If you would just listen,
The sounds take shape and form a rhthym...

Coming straight from the subconscious mind,
And translated into countless lines
Onto paper drawn from magic hands and
translated into a design,
and it's complete...
If you could only see,
true beauty,
These images rise off paper that can be folded,

The empty desert scene,
the sunburst landscaping,
they stand with stilt-like legs
above the sand dunes and the mountain range,

Looking straight from your unconscious minds
These things you see but you ignore,
You don't acknowledge the understanding
of a human's capacity
and how expectations are defied,
If you could only see,
true beauty,
Comes off the page, and stares you in the face,
They rise off paper that can be folded

Swans and naked trees,
Elephants reflecting
the midnight bath
above creatures fly,
and boulders lie below next to the pond...

Hallucinate
and create.




Submitted on 2006-06-30 13:24:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  you said "Naked Trees"
I love saying Naked Trees.
I love this poem.
I love it.
I don't know why other people haven't praised it more, but I love it.
It makes me think.
It makes me have one of those crooked smiles.
I love it.
Keep Writing.
Keep Writing.
Keep Writing.

-Courtney-
p.s. ((missed you))
| Posted on 2006-09-09 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]


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