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Chipped Glassware (Edited)

Author: particularshard
ASL Info:    23/m/DC
Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 1159 /1392 /363
Words: 134
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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At such difficult times for so many of my friends, I remember why they are my friends ykno? Thought I'd polish this one up. Also, be careful of the difference between 'good,' 'bad,' and 'true.'

Chipped Glassware (Edited)

I've developed an affinity for chipped glassware,
But only of a certain type -
The article must be of use
For mere prettiness is trite.

I like the idea of perfection,
The suggestion of what will be or was,
And yes of course I'm quite particular,
For I guard my glass with blood.

And I won't accept just any flaw,
Some cracks are just too deep.
For only glass that's durable,
Is truly good to keep.

A good chip gives glass character,
While a bad one makes it trash.
And the distinction is quite delicate,
In fact formed of sand and ash.

Yes chipped glassware is my favorite type,
My first selection above all
But i'm always sad when Nature shows,
That my chipped glassware has true flaws.

Submitted on 2006-06-30 16:23:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I remember this piece from before, and unlike Someone's Epiphany...this IS you...just a different side. You and your art is multifaceted and dimensional...anyhow. This is still beautiful, and makes me smile when I read it. It gives those who aren't perfect, but aren't too damaged the hope that someone like you is searching for them :-)
| Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by LadyChaos | [ Reply to This ]
  this seems... un you... lol
sorry about that one but im accustomed to long rants exploding with emotion and this obivously aint that...

i do like it however...

i like that idea that though you like the idea of perfection you are fine with flawas yet only certain ones... theres a fine line between chipped and cracked i guess...

i alos like the sand and ash thing...
make me think of ashes to ashes dust to dust and a bit in the bible that says we are jars of clay... i dunno if that was somethng you wanted associated there but thats what happened lol

mere prettiness is trite

i like this line a whole lot...
there are a lotta girls out there in particular that think if they look pretty have all the good clothes the latest fashion craze the hair cut and the makeup that they will be what boys are looking for and well... there are a lotta shallow boys out there who support this theory sadly enough...
but i like the idea here... prettiness is trite...
you can be the prettiest person in the world but if your cracked ughly underneath your cracked ugly underneath...

distinction between good chips and bad chips is well done here and ive already touched on my ideas of sand and ash...

what i think i like most of all is that you are able to see your own flaws... that you are able to see cracks/chips in your own glassware of life look... i guess if you couldnt you would be conceited and this piece would hold no place in my world so yeah... your honesty in this piece is well used.

im not sure im so crazy on whatever rhyme scheme format like thing youve got going on here though.. that could be because ive put you in a box and if i have ill take you right out of it but i just feel like there is no room to put emotion in this piece when trying to stick to comventional patterns i guess...

anyways i really like your veiw on life here...
is the glass half empty of half full or is that for another write...?
| Posted on 2006-06-30 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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