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    dots Submission Name: Don't Need Youdots
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    Author: EsCaPisT
    ASL Info:    17,Female,Singapore
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 42/38/38
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Rant/Misc
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    dotsDon't Need Youdots
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    So i fell and fell
    And never got up
    My leg, like my heart
    Could do nothing but swell
    You did not lift me up
    That's what i could tell.

    When i got misery,
    You pushed it away,
    Giving spastic reasons,
    Everyday.
    Look at me clearly,
    What do you see?
    Practically nobody?

    If you were so kind,
    I'm not that blind,
    I don't need you to cry,
    When I couldn't fly.
    What's the use anyway?
    I've put your trust away.




    Submitted on 2006-07-01 00:59:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      like i said you sort of speak with your soul and not with your fingers or mind.....
    very captivating.
    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-02-07 00:00:00 | by XmaryjaneX | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it very much, I can also relate to it. It flowes well, good job.

    Alexandra
    | Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by Alexandra | [ Reply to This ]


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