This morning's sunrise

Author: LadyMerlina ASL Info:    24/ F/ Montreal Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 60 /93 /58 Words: 85

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This morning's sunrise

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There is a loud humming noise coming from the harbour. Maybe it is just the rolling of the clouds Or the impending thunder. There is a rainbow separating the shades of the sky: The Loud, morose grey and white. A gap And the quiet yet joyfull orange and yellows. Thunderclap Lightning strikes: A light and a shadow projected in the sky. I feel like today will be a good day. Don't ask me why.

Submitted on 2006-07-01 04:45:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I really enjoyed reading this one, I specially liked the ending: I feel like today will be a good day. Don't ask me why. I think you're descriptions about the nature are very good, I could really feel them, I liked this part: Maybe it is just the rolling of the clouds Or the impending thunder. Good job! XoXo Gaby

| Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by Lost_Delirious | [ Reply to This ]

"The imagry was good here. I myself like a good thunder storm, it seems to purify the air. Keep up the good work---Mugs---

| Posted on 2006-07-09 00:00:00 | by mugsy | [ Reply to This ]

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