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Split lip

Author: LadyMerlina
ASL Info:    24/ F/ Montreal
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Words: 38
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Split lip

I bleed and bite back
Ripping the skin to shreds
and fading to black.
I numb out:
not alive, not dead.
It's self inflicted torture, I know for sure.
But after a while, pain isn't pain anymore.

Submitted on 2006-07-01 05:10:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hey, sorry it took me so long to get back to you. I see why you said we are 'kindered spirits'. I like how you quickly jumped to "fading to black"- it's a good image of passing out. Yes, we are definitely kindered spirits.
| Posted on 2006-07-26 00:00:00 | by deafeningsilenc | [ Reply to This ]
  Cool it looks like that you are speaking about a zombie. The last two lines contain a very good paradox
"It's self inflicted torture, I know for sure.
But after a while, pain isn't pain anymore."
You also have a nice metaphor in "and fading to black"

| Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by Duke Medhat | [ Reply to This ]
  Sounds kind of like a droplet of blood, maybe produced from the pain of ones day....yet as time went on, it hit the ground, and found an end...
| Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by Vibrant | [ Reply to This ]

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