Split lip

Author: LadyMerlina ASL Info:    24/ F/ Montreal Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 60 /93 /58 Words: 38

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Split lip

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I bleed and bite back Ripping the skin to shreds Wincing and fading to black. I numb out: not alive, not dead. It's self inflicted torture, I know for sure. But after a while, pain isn't pain anymore.

Submitted on 2006-07-01 05:10:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Hey, sorry it took me so long to get back to you. I see why you said we are 'kindered spirits'. I like how you quickly jumped to "fading to black"- it's a good image of passing out. Yes, we are definitely kindered spirits.

| Posted on 2006-07-26 00:00:00 | by deafeningsilenc | [ Reply to This ]

Cool it looks like that you are speaking about a zombie. The last two lines contain a very good paradox "It's self inflicted torture, I know for sure. But after a while, pain isn't pain anymore." You also have a nice metaphor in "and fading to black" Medhat

| Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by Duke Medhat | [ Reply to This ]

Sounds kind of like a droplet of blood, maybe produced from the pain of ones day....yet as time went on, it hit the ground, and found an end...

| Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by Vibrant | [ Reply to This ]

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