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    dots Submission Name: (H) our Lovedots
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    Author: Vibrant
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 855/538/131
    Words: 50
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    dots(H) our Lovedots
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    As each word is wrote,
    every,
    single one,
    was found,
    because you have been around.

    Please, don't ever think
    of turning around
    for my heart,
    would surely frown.

    I want me
    to be,
    your only thought,
    therefor,
    it will be,
    just you and me,
    loving
    our misery.




    Submitted on 2006-07-01 10:09:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this piece. It's simple, with few words but it says so much. I like the last three lines of this the best, they brought the whole thing together in a strange way. Good write.

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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