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    dots Submission Name: Wretched Refusedots
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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/122
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Some things are easier to get rid of than others.


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    dotsWretched Refusedots
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    Wipe the tears.
    Sweep the porch
    Brush away the crumbs…

    Pizza crusts and soda cans
    Sawdust and chicken bones
    Dishwater, mopwater
    Beer bottles, bongwater
    Ex-wives and Marlboro butts
    Soapscum and ticket stubs
    The TV Guide, yesterday’s Post
    Broken bulbs and burnt toast
    Unmatched socks, baby teeth
    Old phone numbers, sold house keys
    Dog hair, bacon drippings
    Gray hairs and toenail clippings
    Dead batteries
    Dead bodies
    Deadwood
    Dead weight ...

    Are any of these as hard to dispose
    as the poet’s misfit simile?
    Are malformed metaphors worth less?




    Submitted on 2006-07-01 16:01:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Did you really mean worth less or worthless?

    For some reason, this reminds me of the way our momentary sparks of genius cloud our over-all perception of something. How we tend to makes things work in places where they don't.

    Well... I could be way off. Can't sleep. Yes, I am throwing that excuse.

    Anyway, it was nice to read something from you today.

    Ciao.
    | Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Angelo,

    I think while you were typing your comment I may have been rewriting my poem, so I don't know if you were commenting on the original one or the new and improved one. It was titled, "What's in your Dumpster?" but I changed it to "Wretched Refuse." Anyway, your comment pretty much nailed my intent in the poem. We come up with a great line or image or analogy, but somehow it just doesn't seem to fit, so we must oh-so-reluctantly dispose of it.

    Thanks for reading me. I hope you get some sleep!

    Annie

    | Posted on 2006-07-02 00:00:00 | by annie0888 | [ Reply to This ]
      it does seem a shame to just dump them - perhaps they could somehow be recycled; placed in bottles and chucked to sea for distant poets, with poems that are just lacking our own misfit simile, to find.

    or maybe i'm just a dreamer.

    Adam
    | Posted on 2006-07-04 00:00:00 | by Icarus | [ Reply to This ]
      Are you meaning to ask what's in our poetic dumpster which we discard? Metaphors and similes that we throw away due to them not fitting a particular piece? Yea, I know that feeling...

    I'd much rather dump a simile than a dead body though lol.
    Peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]


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