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worm spaghetti

Author: marysunshine
ASL Info:    34, Female,
Elite Ratio:    4.48 - 610 /705 /75
Words: 52
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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ummmm. yeah.

worm spaghetti

The Robin stretches the worm
from the watered ground
like spaghetti
from the pile.

But it seems less bloody
when the bird feeds from the earth
than the noodles
red with marinara.

A meal appears with effort
like a painting comes from blood
and the order
always wins.

Submitted on 2006-07-01 16:50:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  interesting,, only apoet can come up with such nonsense and not be considered a nut!!!!
have you been bird watching?
| Posted on 2006-07-18 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]

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