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    dots Submission Name: The Ghostsdots
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    Author: Slit
    ASL Info:    18/Male/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.08 - 5/10/11
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Poetry/I hate you
    Total Views: 950
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1477



    Description:
       My tribute to the boys in White!


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    dotsThe Ghostsdots
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    Time has passed, I've waited,
    I've been so calm and patient,
    I only hope I make it,
    To make sure you don't escape it.

    With me I'll bring my vengeance,
    And rid us of your presence,
    Reap what you sow, menace,
    Recieve your life's sentence.

    It was you who tried to judge me,
    Placed your flesh above me,
    But a coward's words won't budge me,
    Revenge will be so lovely.

    Watch my sick mind's tricks unfold,
    Your bones are cold, you once were bold,
    Your death will bring me bliss untold,
    I hope the devil slits your soul.

    Without a flaming cross behind you,
    And somewhere where your Klan can't find you,
    It seems your fear has redefined you,
    What happened to all the hate inside you?

    At my hands you'll get your fate,
    Your propaganda was tough but fake,
    You'll gag on dust you fucking snake,
    In your blood the ground will bathe.

    Man to man, you cowered down,
    I hear no screams of "power" now,
    My voice became the louder sound,
    Your noble blood shall shower down.

    You said you'd slay all Brown and Black,
    Now you're my bitch, how odd is that?
    For every race you've mocked, attacked,
    I'm coming, boy, you've met your match.




    Submitted on 2006-07-01 18:05:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this, it's powerful and emotionaly charged. I really like the last stanza. I think you took the ryming to an ultimant extent which kinda brings it down a bit to me it ddoesn't sound like it was wrotoe with the same passtion it would have been without it to me but that's only my opinion to each his own. All in all it's good. Keep writing.

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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