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    dots Submission Name: Independence Lament: 4th of July - 2006dots
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    Author: oixi
    ASL Info:    50/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 196/243/100
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       A Poem for the 4th of July


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    dotsIndependence Lament: 4th of July - 2006dots
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    Swiftly the wind runs the gauntlet of time,
    blows boldly through ages like a shot into space.
    Two centuries pass plus decades thrice doth grind,
    churning birth of a Nation now fallen from grace.

    Bitterly born by battling to be
    liberated in a likeness to lead.
    Forever enforcing franchise to free
    people persecuted, but nary to plead.

    Nation born of revolution long ago,
    now Super Power, diplomatically demands.
    Or use of preemptive strike to surprise the foe
    and sacrifice liberties for scare tactic plans.

    Ghosts of founding fathers in sorrow must moan
    to see what has become of the Nation they made.
    Their Declarations fading, to destruction now prone,
    Independence lamented for the price that's been paid.

    Happy 4th of July - 2006




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      abousolutly astounding!!!! that was a great wirte!! i love your rhyming, hell i love the whole damn thing!!! you are a very talented poet! extremely talented! i hope that i get to read some more of your poetry!!! keep it up..
    | Posted on 2006-07-01 00:00:00 | by psycotic cowboy | [ Reply to This ]


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