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    dots Submission Name: Untitled2dots
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    Author: redthewitch
    ASL Info:    36/f/tiny rural village
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 267/175/26
    Words: 24
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 1343
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 168



    Description:
       Just playing around here, this isn't definite. I am sure it will all change, once I can work it out on paper. I don't usually to a submission straight from the computer.


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    dotsUntitled2dots
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    Cinnamon and cigarettes
    light rain falling
    on us both
    We kissed once
    and then again
    How will I ever make it
    through the night?




    Submitted on 2004-05-15 00:57:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this one. It's very evocative. Left as it is, it's a good minimalist poem.
    | Posted on 2004-05-16 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this piece has alot of promise..
    I like the thought of cinnamon scented kisses too...
    I would do without the cigs though, not my style ,
    I can't wait to see what you do with it..
    be sure to let me know..
    and I'll check it out.
    nuttin but luv
    ORA
    | Posted on 2004-05-15 00:00:00 | by Oracle | [ Reply to This ]


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