Description: This poem was written during a very confusing period in my life. It seemed nothing was going right for me, and I had so many questions to why things are the way they are. This poem was meant to capture that confusion, and I hope you enjoy reading this, and thank you for taking the time to read it.
This was a really good write and i have to say I love the flow, some people can't make rhymes work, but you pulled it off perfeclty. you had a lot of good points, and I think you did capture confusion and questioning things pretty well, the only thing that I didn't like about this, and I know that it's each persons right to have their own opinions and beliefs, and I'm not saying that's a bad thing but personally the whole god thing wouldn't play in to a write like this, but it's your write. so yeah other than that this was a really really good write, oh and one more small trivial thing, it's kinda a pet peeve of mine when a write doesn't have a title, it just makes it feel incomplete. but yeah this was great, I'm gonna pick out a few of my fave lines and give my perception of them just cuz I am bored & feel like it "all because I'm scared scared to be the one who's hated" it's almost funny how much we'll go through to be seen as 'right', to be accepted and appriciated even if it's not who we really are. it's a pointless cycle that never seems to end unless we're strong enough to stand up and put an end to it even if it's not what everyone else wants. "for my degree in life to be earned" I thought this was a cool concept because there are some things we have to go through and deal with as we live and thats an original way of putting it. "even though it might mean that I have a broken heart to mend" another very good point, sometimes it's hard to do the 'right' thing if that means you getting hurt but you know you should and you're mature enough to admit that. "Today's troubles seem overwhelming but tommorow's may only be worse" that's always a comforting thought, it could almost always be worse, and when it can't, then it's bound to get better. "but thank you also for the struggles and the imperfect life I've been handed." that was a sweet, lighthearted ending that is a nice change from a lot of writes on this site. all in all great write, I can't wait for your next one much love, ~jess
This lesson in patience is a lesson that must learned (be learned? ) other than that, this isn't a peice i can say much aboutm but that I hope your answers are answered and htis time in your life has passed with god endings.
Very motivating, like a life coach speaking to a student. Your rhyme was good, but the flow was a little iffy. I liked the courage abd strenght you showed towards the end of this write and point to God as your source of support, without being pushy. This was really good. Welcome to Elite.
I like it, it speaks of the reality, of the humans’ situation: confused with nothing to hold on to but the faith in god …You have two spelling errors : “tommorow's “should be “tomorrow’s” and in the first stanza it’s “but “you missed the T, it’s nothing much .
Overanalyzing is my weakness the monster I've created all because I'm scared scared to be the one who's hated
I think this is the most stanza that I can relate to it, my favorite line is:” and silence is the only sound I hear”. Great write, it’s nice to see some people still holding on to god even though the pain of life is constant. Have a nice day and welcome to elite skill, I’m sure this link will be helpful to you as it was to me. ~~Drakoniss~~