Description: This is a real situation that happened to me. It was the last day of our exams of the last year of the high school, so I will never see her again. I was in a shaded corner of my school building and as I am depressed I saw shadow darkness
At the dark corner -------------------------------------------
At the dark corner was I
Watching you twinkling at the light
I can't even say good bye
I do not have enough might
The slow, fast watch is ticking
Should I laugh, should I cry?
Should I hope, should I try?
My attempts well define failing
As my heart is empty and dry
I can tell you our future
For you they will choose stupid guy
My future is like my corner
Well the rhyming seemed kind of forced, especially things like I and bye and light and might, it's just not natural rhyming, you would have produced a better poem if you hadn't tried to rhyme it, it would've flowed better as well because this seemed rather stilted. However the idea behind this is very good and some of your description is very good like 'As my heart is empty and dry', and the idea about the corner makes the piece very original. I think if you go over the poem again and edit using the same idea but giving it more freedom of flow and no rhymes then it would be really really good. So it has potential certainly, keep going.