Description: Another haiku, rather a set of two of them. I was thinking how pretty it is when the marine layer settle over my town at night and everything seems to calm down including the pacific ocean. I guess it is just a relaxing moment to observe and take in. So I thought of this. Enjoy.
An Ocean's Lullaby -------------------------------------------
The fog settles low
over the vast ocean bed;
Like a grey blanket.
Lulling her to sleep
as the moon bid all good night;
Laxed now are her waves.
I really like this, the imagery is very strong. However I feel the second half is stronger than the other, and could even work on its own. Otherwise I thikn its very good, I've never tried a haiku myself but they don't look easy!
i couldnt agree with swanne anymore. your haikus are beautiful and they arent that easy to write beautifully. but again, you have a gift. your haikus are filled with enough imagery and imagination to fill pages. very very nice. take care birdy
I think this is a wonderful haiku. Just beautiful is the imagery here and I really like how you have used the fog as a blanket for the ocean. That is very imaginative. And you included the moon here as well which is my favorite and the imagery in my mind is lovely. All that is missing here is the lighthouse reflecting this vision. But that is ok cause I have provided that in my mind haha! A very good haiku you have here. Just lovely. Take care.
I apologize for my late comments on all your works. I have actually read all your new posts several times, but the stupid fluctuation in the electricity gives up and reboots the computer. This is the 8th time I am writing this:
This is really good. I really liked the descriptions you used to create a beautiful picture in my mind. I have never seen anything like a Marine Layer. To tell you the truth, I had never heard of it until now. Though I did check and it looked really cool. Some thing like what you described. Anyways, I liked both of them
This is really cool. I've never been able to do haikus, not so that they sound good and make sense. I dont know, never had much of a taste for them. But these are really good. and its cool how you managed to have two of them, that go so well together. You captured the mood very well. ~Nichole
Maggie I love this And I love the style of uniting haikus into one write As you know I have written a couple of them myself I do hope you are doing great I know with your positive attitude you are good I love the ocean myself For some reason I favor the Atlantic over the Pacific though probably because that is where I grew up and where all my early childhood memories happenend Once Again Another terrific write from you God Bless Ron