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    dots Submission Name: Crying in the raindots

    Author: EsCaPisT
    ASL Info:    17,Female,Singapore
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 42/38/38
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
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    dotsCrying in the raindots

    I held back all the tears i had
    Whispered out your name
    For the last time in my life
    No burns that made me sad

    Now i'm walking out the door
    Not crying anymore
    Till i see this dark blue sky
    It tells me how life goes by...
    I feel like crying in the rain
    Tearing out this pain
    Pour it from my aching heart
    I took from you too hard

    Coz i can't bear with all these doings
    You cleared out all my things
    And now you throw them out the window
    I sang a leaving song
    And as i stepped out of the door

    I feel like crying in the rain
    Buried in the pain
    So hurt and cut in my own place
    Tears are on my face
    Coz i was crying in the rain

    I thought i was the only sad one
    But the sky felt it too
    They came in torrents down
    And now my tears should too
    I've held it back for so long
    But when it all fell down
    I feel like crying in the rain

    Submitted on 2006-07-03 05:53:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
    this is EXACTLY how i felt when the house i grew up was burned down a couple yrs ago.
    but instead of a lover or spouse throwing my [censored] out the window i felt like God was doing that instead.

    i mean hell we were kinda still living in the thing.
    and some [censored] who hated my sister....

    ANYWAY, this is going on my fav.
    nice job babe.
    | Posted on 2007-02-07 00:00:00 | by XmaryjaneX | [ Reply to This ]
      EXCELLENT this is me in a nutshell and this poem is so thoughtful

    again excellent ... totally speechless
    | Posted on 2006-07-03 00:00:00 | by Deadly whisper | [ Reply to This ]
      Awesome. I thought this was original, and wonderful. I think pretty much everyone can relate. I've held back my tears for a long time, but I still haven't let them out. I use my writing to let my feelings out cause I can't cry...well that's what I tell myself. Anyway, good job and keep writing!
    | Posted on 2006-07-03 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]
      you have a real talent for writing about things people as a whole can relate to. keep it up.
    as for relating, i used to be able to relate but i just cant cry anymore...
    but anyways just keep up the good work. you really have a gift.

    | Posted on 2006-07-03 00:00:00 | by luvneverreturnd | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great poem. I know everyone is saying this but I can really relate. You are a great writer.
    | Posted on 2006-07-03 00:00:00 | by Saphyra | [ Reply to This ]
      I really likes this...its fantastic! I can totally relate! ive tried holding my back but they just keep on coming! Well awesome job and keep on writing!

    | Posted on 2006-07-03 00:00:00 | by dark_secrets_ | [ Reply to This ]

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