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    dots Submission Name: Roots of evildots
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    Author: hotrodruss
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 396/342/116
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsRoots of evildots
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    Roots of evil

    In a field rich with a love so pure
    Lush carpet of flowers blooming everywhere
    Clear sparkling rivers flowing here and there
    Joy and hope with no limitation
    Thatís how it used to be

    Roots of evil
    Slowly spreading itís destruction
    Dividing hearts plentiful
    Burning flames of hate

    A family weld together with love
    Battling to overcome unseen forces
    Victory with no limit
    Peace beyond understanding
    What more can one desire

    Roots of evil
    Slowly spreading its destruction
    Dividing hearts aplenty
    Burning flames of hate

    Golden rays of sun light
    Warm gentle breezes
    Glistening morning dew
    Not one cloud blocking the heavenly view
    Songs of mother nature

    Roots of evil
    Slowly spreading its destruction
    Dividing hearts aplentiful
    Burning flames of hate

    Donít allow the roots of evil
    To take ahold in you
    Resist it with all your might
    Fight against it with love
    And the sweet taste of victory will come

    © 07/03/06 HotRodRuss





    Submitted on 2006-07-03 07:44:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like! Though the only problem is, at some points you rhyme, you did it about two or three times, and it sounds weird when those are the only two places where anything rhymes.
    | Posted on 2006-11-20 00:00:00 | by Two Meters Away | [ Reply to This ]
      To tell the truth, I kinda got lost until the very end. Though I did like the contrasting stanzas. I haven't seen that in a while and it was nice to come upon. It was almost like describing a dream while hanging a subtle, yet strong warning above your head. I liked this one, good job.
    | Posted on 2006-07-03 00:00:00 | by Jakirina | [ Reply to This ]


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