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three stanzas and a cold pot of coffee


Author: gjenkins
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Words: 100
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three stanzas and a cold pot of coffee



these dumb hands won’t let
me write today, I flail them into the
discontent air; as foreign soil and withered
dreams unite in my demise

mannequin eyes watch from
store windows, laughing at
legless spiders---I’m not
much use anymore, clever
yes, but not much use.
9-11 fleshed out on park benches
staring at weeping birds as they
fly over the syndromed society

as the bombs hit
targets of destination,
I am strife, given name and address,
I walk around
the block a few times,
then take it inside for
something cool to
drink.




Submitted on 2006-07-03 09:28:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I liked it thins one, very good, i happen to like your writing style..i mean its unique its very genuine. Good write though, proves a point and still abstract...very good..keep writing and keep happy...

-Anya
| Posted on 2006-07-03 00:00:00 | by FarawayFeelings | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked how the poem started, the title and stuff, but as I read further and further, I got very confused of what the purpose of your poem was. I think maybe you might have had a brain freeze or something and just wrote down some words to sound like poetry. Overall, I think that your poem was just O.K.
| Posted on 2006-07-03 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]
  I really liked your poem, the wordplay was amazing. I do not understand parts of it but that is why i liked it so. This is going on my favs:)

-Creep
| Posted on 2006-07-03 00:00:00 | by Mr. Creep | [ Reply to This ]


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